You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job.Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment in your letter.• Describe the problem with the equipment• Explain how this problem is affecting

Essay topics:

You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job.

Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment in your letter.

• Describe the problem with the equipment

• Explain how this problem is affecting your work

• Say what you want the shop or company to do

Dear sir,

I am writing this letter to complain you that last thursday I brought a web camera from your shop and now its does not work properly.

I am a freelance worker. Most of my work I have to do from my computer via internet and I also done it from my home. my last web cam was completely damaged that why last thursday 9th october I brought a web camera from you house. Therefore, after returning home I install it at my pc and start to use. But picture quality of this camara is very poor. it does not work as it written in the box.

without web camera I did not contact to my supervisor and can not hand over their project that they give me. As a result, my project deadline is now nearly over and if it is cancel then I have a huge loss and have to suffer economically.

I thing reading the above circumstance, you can understand my problem and help me to change the damaged web camera to a new one.

I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Your sincerely,

XYZ

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear sir, I am writing this letter to complain you...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: My
...ternet and I also done it from my home. my last web cam was completely damaged tha...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...re quality of this camara is very poor. it does not work as it written in the box....
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Without
...s not work as it written in the box. without web camera I did not contact to my supe...
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Line 7, column 175, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'canceled', 'cancelled'.
Suggestion: canceled; cancelled
...eadline is now nearly over and if it is cancel then I have a huge loss and have to suf...
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Line 9, column 3, Rule ID: YOU_THING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'think' or 'thinks'?
Suggestion: think; thinks
...s and have to suffer economically. I thing reading the above circumstance, you can...
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Line 13, column 16, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d to hearing from you. Your sincerely, XYZ
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, then, therefore, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 32.9175257732 122% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 22.0 26.3917525773 83% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 798.0 937.175257732 85% => OK
No of words: 190.0 206.0 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.2 4.54256449028 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39459802952 2.54303337028 94% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 127.690721649 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.573684210526 0.622605031667 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 253.8 290.88556701 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2915640393 44.8134815571 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.5 76.5299724578 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8333333333 16.8248392259 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.41666666667 4.34317383033 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.49484536082 334% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148006539528 0.216113520407 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0550033435742 0.0766984524023 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0430716185123 0.0603063233224 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.085858599508 0.12726935374 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0484478530625 0.0580467560999 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.3 8.37731958763 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 81.63 70.7449484536 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 7.45979381443 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.78 8.71597938144 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.62 7.59969072165 87% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 41.2886597938 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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