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You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:you shoud describe the training course you want to doyou should explain what the

Essay topics: You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:
you shoud describe the training course you want to do
you should explain what the company could do to help me
you should say how the course will be useful for your job

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Dear Sir or Madam,

It is my pleasure to work as a software developer in your company. I appreciate your patience and assistance. I am writing this letter to inform you that I intend to participate in an important training course and also ask if you would be generous as to allow me to finish the course.

It is an IT training course organised by the University of Melbourne. The training course involves a variety of advance technologies and contemporary knowledge, such as three-dimensional print, artificial intelligence and a series of programming languages. At the end of course, learners will be divided into different groups and each of the group will be allocated a team project to complete. The training course will start on next Monday.

I would like the company to temporarily distribute my unfinished work to other colleagues, as I must spend the following two weeks on finishing the training course. The training course is extremely crucial to me, as I am able to drastically enhance my technical skills by obtaining the knowledge. In addition, my communicating ability can also be improved by completing the team project.

I hope that my request will not inconvenience the company too much. I look forward to hearing from you.

Your sincerely,

David Villa

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 7, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'an' or 'IT'?
Suggestion: an; IT
...allow me to finish the course. It is an IT training course organised by the Univer...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, as to, in addition, of course, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1079.0 937.175257732 115% => OK
No of words: 212.0 206.0 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08962264151 4.54256449028 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81578560438 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16135932365 2.54303337028 124% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 127.690721649 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603773584906 0.622605031667 97% => OK
syllable_count: 340.2 290.88556701 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.360824742268 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.1965207742 44.8134815571 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0 76.5299724578 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3076923077 16.8248392259 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84615384615 4.34317383033 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300460839555 0.216113520407 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100158772094 0.0766984524023 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693514338747 0.0603063233224 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169661564799 0.12726935374 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109297224416 0.0580467560999 188% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 8.37731958763 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 70.7449484536 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 8.71597938144 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 7.59969072165 111% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 41.2886597938 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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flaws:
No. of Words: 212 250

Don't repeat words like : 'as I ...'

Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.5 out of 9
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 212 250
No. of Characters: 1033 1200
No. of Different Words: 125 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.816 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.873 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.086 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 79 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 63 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 14.133 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.66 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.333 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.315 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.682 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.107 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5

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