You work in an office and have recently been experiencing a health problem. You think that the problem started because of the working conditions in the office. Write a letter to your manager.
In your letter:
describe the health problem
explain why you think it was caused by conditions in the office
suggest what the manager should do to improve the working conditions in the office
Dear Mr James,
I am writing to inform you about the health issue, which I am currently facing because of the present working conditions at the workplace, and I would like to suggest ideas to improve this situation.
With regard to the health problem, I have been suffering from severe back pain for the last two weeks, which I neglected earlier and took pain killers to reduce the pain. Now the pain is too severe that I consulted a physiotherapist yesterday, and he described it as the case of unwanted strain on the upper and lower back.
As for the reason why it was caused by the work environment, I can only assume it was the result of the newly allocated office chair, not only is which less comfortable, but also inflexible. It is also my opinion that my back might have been affected because of the bad sitting posture, as caused by that chair.
Because the office sitting arrangement has health-related concerns, may I suggest you contact the facility team to review the chair design, and recommend that they should consider replacing the current one with the new ergonomic chair, which is specifically designed for office employees, and ensure that they work comfortably for long hours.
I sincerely hope that my suggestion would be helpful to improve the working conditions in the office.
Yours sincerely,
Mandeep
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, well, as for, as to, as well as, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.03092783505 330% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1134.0 937.175257732 121% => OK
No of words: 228.0 206.0 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97368421053 4.54256449028 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88582923847 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75419040539 2.54303337028 108% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 127.690721649 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59649122807 0.622605031667 96% => OK
syllable_count: 343.8 290.88556701 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 0.463917525773 1078% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 16.3608247423 171% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.8835427454 44.8134815571 194% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.75 76.5299724578 185% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5 16.8248392259 169% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.875 4.34317383033 204% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220453419258 0.216113520407 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0824865612571 0.0766984524023 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437977206412 0.0603063233224 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101578199942 0.12726935374 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0375529963257 0.0580467560999 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 8.37731958763 193% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 70.7449484536 73% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 7.45979381443 174% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 8.71597938144 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 7.59969072165 118% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 41.2886597938 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 8.62886597938 209% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.2 8.54432989691 154% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.