You work in an office where you sit and do your work the whole day You are worried about the effect of this on your health Write a letter to your manager In your letter Explain how sitting always is affecting your health Suggest changes the company can ma

Essay topics:

You work in an office where you sit and do your work the whole day. You are worried about the effect of this on your health.
Write a letter to your manager. In your letter
• Explain how sitting always is affecting your health
• Suggest changes the company can make to help you stay healthy
• Explain how these changes can help the company in future

Dear Sir,
I am writing this letter to you because I am sitting in front office reception desk all day. This is giving problem to my right feet and it is paining also.
My morning starting with me talk to customers and always sitting on my chair taking calls on switch board and sending calls to people. I get up only once for water and lunch also me having on my desk.
For me my job is easy and I like very much but my feet gets too much pain by evening because I am not moving but siting in one place whole day. I am suggesting you to please help me by putting me in filing department in the afternoon. Also, there I can move and file the papers. One staff from there can take care of my desk.
I think like this it is good for our company to sitting people can get chance to move and filing people can get some rest sitting in reception desk it will be change for staff and will help staff in future.
I am hoping that you will take my suggestion and help me in this health problem and make change to working condition quickly. I am hoping to see your email on changes soon.
Regards,
Harihar

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to you because ...
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Line 2, column 152, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...blem to my right feet and it is paining also. My morning starting with me talk to c...
^^^^
Line 5, column 197, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...be change for staff and will help staff in future. I am hoping that you will take my su...
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Line 6, column 127, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ke change to working condition quickly. I am hoping to see your email on changes ...
^
Line 7, column 9, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ee your email on changes soon. Regards, Harihar
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, so, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 5.05154639175 238% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 32.9175257732 112% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 891.0 937.175257732 95% => OK
No of words: 216.0 206.0 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.125 4.54256449028 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.83365862548 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.05980021372 2.54303337028 81% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 127.690721649 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537037037037 0.622605031667 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 275.4 290.88556701 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8332663451 44.8134815571 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.0 76.5299724578 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6363636364 16.8248392259 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 4.34317383033 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192527751381 0.216113520407 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0682734276903 0.0766984524023 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.066090084133 0.0603063233224 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116205113658 0.12726935374 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0741888621276 0.0580467560999 128% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 8.37731958763 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 70.7449484536 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.67 8.71597938144 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.41 7.59969072165 84% => OK
difficult_words: 25.0 41.2886597938 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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