You would like to join the local orchestra
Write a letter of application to the orchestra. In the letter:
– Introduce yourself and your instrument of choice
– Explain how your credentials make you a good candidate
– Express your enthusiasm for music
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing this letter to show my interest and to apply to be part of the Lake town orchestra.
I have been formally training to play the piano since I was 7 years old. Along with that, I can also play the
electronic keybpoard and have an advanced understanding of reading music sheets. I would , moreover,
also like to highlight that I have been playing this instrument daily for 15 years and can learn new songs
without extra guidance.
In 2019, I ranked first in the inter-state talent hunt for displaying my ability to play the a famous song by
the renowned musician Bethoven. Additionally, I was also the head of the song and dance group at my
high school during my final year.
I love playing the piano because it has such a calming effect and it generates beautiful sounds. Due to
these reasons, I have always wanted to be a professional pianist. I practice minimum for an hour daily
where I try to put my own take on the latest songs. I have also recently created a mixed tape with my
best covers and also with a few of my own original music. I have attached a pendrive with those songs
that I have played on my piano for your listen.
I am very keen to be a part of your esteemed orchestra. I look forward to your positive revert at your
earliest convenience.
Yours faithfully,
Karishma Dave
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 31, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'playing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'train' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: playing
...estra. I have been formally training to play the piano since I was 7 years old. Alon...
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Line 6, column 89, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...tanding of reading music sheets. I would , moreover, also like to highlight that ...
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Line 10, column 90, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'a' is left.
Suggestion: the; a
... hunt for displaying my ability to play the a famous song by the renowned musician B...
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Line 17, column 59, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...so with a few of my own original music. I have attached a pendrive with those son...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... played on my piano for your listen. I am very keen to be a part of your estee...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...o be a part of your esteemed orchestra. I look forward to your positive revert at...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, look, moreover, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 32.9175257732 118% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1117.0 937.175257732 119% => OK
No of words: 243.0 206.0 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59670781893 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94822203886 3.78020617076 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60674746703 2.54303337028 103% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 127.690721649 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588477366255 0.622605031667 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 337.5 290.88556701 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.13402061856 175% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.5016196539 44.8134815571 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.7857142857 76.5299724578 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3571428571 16.8248392259 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5 4.34317383033 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 15.0 4.29896907216 349% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 7.41237113402 148% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144602700152 0.216113520407 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0583615510879 0.0766984524023 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0609300837465 0.0603063233224 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0449337621084 0.12726935374 35% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0671163866716 0.0580467560999 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 8.37731958763 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.1 8.71597938144 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 41.2886597938 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.