You would like to join the local orchestra
Write a letter of application to the orchestra. In the letter:
– Introduce yourself and your instrument of choice
– Explain how your credentials make you a good candidate
– Express your enthusiasm for music
Dear Ravi,
I am Mr Shreyas Parab, residing in Indralok Colony, I am writing to be a part of your orchestra team as a drummer.
I have been playing drums for last 12 years, I have performed at various shows organised in country. I have started my career in ABC Band, furthermore, now I play at Cloud9 band which is recognized all over the world for its famous song, "Life is Happening". I have even got an appreciation for my drumming skills at India Music Festival and many others. Additionally, I have more than one lakh subscribers on my Desi-Drummer youtube channel.
I saw your orchestra performance at Twinkle auditorium, it was breathtaking to see the co-ordination among your members. I listen and practise for orchestra plays, my favourite team is "Real Magicians" from the United States of America. I follow their drummer, Mr Roy Kanon a lot. He has been my inspiration since childhood
I hope to play with your crew, looking forward to a positive response.
Yours faithfully,
Shreyas Parab
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... been my inspiration since childhood I hope to play with your crew looking for...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, look, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 4.92783505155 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 32.9175257732 79% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 26.3917525773 72% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 832.0 937.175257732 89% => OK
No of words: 172.0 206.0 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83720930233 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62144681703 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94583333174 2.54303337028 116% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 127.690721649 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.691860465116 0.622605031667 111% => OK
syllable_count: 261.0 290.88556701 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 12.6804123711 8% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 172.0 16.3608247423 1051% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 44.8134815571 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 832.0 76.5299724578 1087% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 172.0 16.8248392259 1022% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 25.0 4.34317383033 576% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 7.41237113402 13% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15620656145 0.216113520407 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.15620656145 0.0766984524023 204% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0603063233224 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0989831072635 0.12726935374 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0448314396174 0.0580467560999 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 87.4 8.37731958763 1043% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -94.64 70.7449484536 -134% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 3.82989690722 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 69.2 7.45979381443 928% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.98 8.71597938144 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 16.21 7.59969072165 213% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 44.0 41.2886597938 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 57.0 8.62886597938 661% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 70.8 8.54432989691 829% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 57.0 8.15463917526 699% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... been my inspiration since childhood I hope to play with your crew looking for...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, look, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 4.92783505155 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 32.9175257732 79% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 26.3917525773 72% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 832.0 937.175257732 89% => OK
No of words: 172.0 206.0 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83720930233 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62144681703 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94583333174 2.54303337028 116% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 127.690721649 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.691860465116 0.622605031667 111% => OK
syllable_count: 261.0 290.88556701 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 12.6804123711 8% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 172.0 16.3608247423 1051% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 44.8134815571 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 832.0 76.5299724578 1087% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 172.0 16.8248392259 1022% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 25.0 4.34317383033 576% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 7.41237113402 13% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15620656145 0.216113520407 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.15620656145 0.0766984524023 204% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0603063233224 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0989831072635 0.12726935374 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0448314396174 0.0580467560999 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 87.4 8.37731958763 1043% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -94.64 70.7449484536 -134% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 3.82989690722 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 69.2 7.45979381443 928% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.98 8.71597938144 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 16.21 7.59969072165 213% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 44.0 41.2886597938 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 57.0 8.62886597938 661% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 70.8 8.54432989691 829% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 57.0 8.15463917526 699% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.