You have a friend who lives in a city abroad You have decided that you would like to apply to do a course at one of the colleges in this city Write to your friend explaining what you would like to do Tell him her what type of work or studies you have been

Essay topics:

You have a friend who lives in a city abroad.
You have decided that you would like to apply to do a course at one of the colleges in this city.
Write to your friend explaining what you would like to do. Tell him/her what type of work or studies you have been doing for the past few years and ask for assistance in contacting an appropriate institution.

Dear Siddhesh,
I hope you are doing well. Since long time we have not heard from each other. I have graduated in year 2016 and have gained industrial experience as a Technical Sales Engineer since then. However, I am looking forward for getting masters from Toronto, Canada.
After completing mechanical engineering in 2016, I have been working in Pilot Gaskets and Engineers, not only providing the technical solutions to the industries related to C-class industrial items but also cost effective techniques as well. I am very much keep to learn data analysis and use this tools to enhance my sales capabilities.
That’s the reason, I am looking to get Master’s Degree in Business Intelligence, I have appeared for IELTS and scored 8.5. Based on the score and my past experience please help me in recommending the proper institution to enhance my capabilities further.
Looking forward to hearing back from you.
Thanks and Regards,
Shreyas Parab

Votes
Average: 4.6 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 28, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...r Siddhesh, I hope you are doing well. Since long time we have not heard from each o...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 149, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experience'.
Suggestion: experience
...d scored 8.5. Based on the score and my past experience please help me in recommending the prop...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, look, so, then, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 4.92783505155 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 32.9175257732 49% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 805.0 937.175257732 86% => OK
No of words: 155.0 206.0 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1935483871 4.54256449028 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.52844152537 3.78020617076 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84877979246 2.54303337028 112% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 127.690721649 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.690322580645 0.622605031667 111% => OK
syllable_count: 244.8 290.88556701 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 81.1762295682 44.8134815571 181% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.4444444444 76.5299724578 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2222222222 16.8248392259 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.44444444444 4.34317383033 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150333871903 0.216113520407 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0662596786929 0.0766984524023 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.062864489616 0.0603063233224 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0967941384676 0.12726935374 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0543654148283 0.0580467560999 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 8.37731958763 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 70.7449484536 77% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 8.71597938144 144% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.47 7.59969072165 125% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 41.2886597938 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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