Your brother couldn’t join you on a trip that you guys planned. Write a letter to a friend inviting him to join:•explain about the trip•explain why your brother couldn’t make it•giving details about the trip.

Essay topics:

Your brother couldn’t join you on a trip that you guys planned. Write a letter to a friend inviting him to join:
• explain about the trip
• explain why your brother couldn’t make it
• giving details about the trip.

Dear Rick

I hope you everything goes well! I’m writing you to invite you to my trip group. is it a surprise?

recently I have organized a trip for pleasure to Japan for 10 days. Moreover, all the members are all our classmates. I have planned to go to tokyo, Osaka and Kyoto. we could enjoy the hot spring around the Fuji-mountain and drink some Japanese wine. Personally speaking, it’s a amazing experience which make me too exciting to sleep.

I have also called my brother John to joining my team. you know about him right? But unfortunately, he got a heavy toothache recently. Therefore, I think you are the best member to take his place on account of the tickets have all been booked.

we will assemble at my home in 18th this month, then we go to the airport by bus. The plane will arrived tokyo airport at night on 19th . Afterwards , my friend Linda will pick us up by car and drive to the hotel. The following plan is at back of this letter.

I look forward to receiving your response.

See you soon!

Nathan

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...l arrived tokyo airport at night on 19th . Afterwards , my friend Linda will pick ...
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Suggestion: ,
...yo airport at night on 19th . Afterwards , my friend Linda will pick us up by car ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, look, moreover, so, then, therefore, well, i think, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 860.0 937.175257732 92% => OK
No of words: 188.0 206.0 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57446808511 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70287850203 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54301498379 2.54303337028 100% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 127.690721649 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.702127659574 0.622605031667 113% => OK
syllable_count: 261.0 290.88556701 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 12.6804123711 134% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 16.3608247423 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.6792835869 44.8134815571 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 50.5882352941 76.5299724578 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 11.0588235294 16.8248392259 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.17647058824 4.34317383033 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 2.54639175258 314% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.94845360825 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214563491623 0.216113520407 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.054104737711 0.0766984524023 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0723134281584 0.0603063233224 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112866230984 0.12726935374 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0893173587923 0.0580467560999 154% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.6 8.37731958763 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.23 70.7449484536 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 7.45979381443 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.04 8.71597938144 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 7.59969072165 95% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 41.2886597938 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 8.62886597938 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 8.54432989691 75% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 8.15463917526 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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