Your child is going on a school trip abroad for three days and the headmaster of the school has asked any parents if they would like to come along to assist. You would like to go.
Write a letter to the headmaster.
In your letter:
Say why you would like to go
Suggest what you could do to help during the trip
Ask some further questions about the trip
Dear Mr Jenkins,
I am writing to you regarding the upcoming trip to Paris for which you are looking for people to accompany the children. I am the father of Joshua Williams and I would be delighted to join the trip and to help out.
I can assist during this time because I am currently off work for a few months and I would like to find something to fill up my free time, and this would be perfect. As you may remember, I have helped the school out on a variety of events, such as at the school sports day last summer and also at the jumble sale just a few months ago, and I thoroughly enjoyed being of assistance.
There are a number of things I could do to help out. I can come early in the morning to the school before we leave and make sure everybody is accounted for and on the bus. But of particular relevance is the fact that I can speak French and I know Paris quite well, so I will be able to assist with the day-to-day practicalities of moving the children around and going to the museums and other attractions that we will visit.
There are, though, some things I would still like to know about and to clarify. Do you have an itinerary you can send me so I know what we are going to see whilst there? This will be useful as I can then prepare myself with some background reading. I also wondered what time exactly are you due to arrive back in the UK at the school? I have an event in the evening of the 15th when we are due to come back. Although I can miss it, I would like to let them know in advance if this will be the case.
Thank you for considering my offer and I look forward to hearing from you,
Yours sincerely
John
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...hted to join the trip and to help out. I can assist during this time because I a...
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Line 6, column 426, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d other attractions that we will visit. There are, though, some things I would s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, may, regarding, so, still, then, well, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.48453608247 187% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 4.92783505155 345% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 5.05154639175 277% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 32.9175257732 140% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 26.3917525773 197% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1332.0 937.175257732 142% => OK
No of words: 324.0 206.0 157% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.11111111111 4.54256449028 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 3.78020617076 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26854161406 2.54303337028 89% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 127.690721649 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524691358025 0.622605031667 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 416.7 290.88556701 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.463917525773 647% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 16.3608247423 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.6175442148 44.8134815571 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.1428571429 76.5299724578 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1428571429 16.8248392259 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.78571428571 4.34317383033 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 7.41237113402 148% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267707368396 0.216113520407 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0847772254146 0.0766984524023 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0468295422343 0.0603063233224 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138233500753 0.12726935374 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.033910199306 0.0580467560999 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 8.37731958763 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 73.51 70.7449484536 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.85 8.71597938144 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.73 7.59969072165 89% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 8.62886597938 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 8.54432989691 131% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.