Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go.
Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:
• Say why you would like to go on the trip
• Suggest what you could do to help during the trip
• Ask other questions about the trip
Dear Mr Sam,
I am John, father of Sophie William, who is an eighth standard student in your school. I am writing this letter to let you know that, as you are exploring parents, who could accompany your students on the International trip to France, I would like to nominate myself for this.
There are two main reasons that are strong enough to prove my eligibility for this task. Firstly, as I am a native French speaker, I can easily act as a translator between children and the French people. This would ease their stay in France. Also, as I have lived my childhood in Paris, I can take the kids around and show them places of their interests.
Moreover, I am aware that there is a tremendous difference between the cultures of the two countries, I will make sure that each student gets involved in most of the local activities and learn from their culture. In addition, I would also ensure their safety and security, along with this I would make sure that they have a proper diet and an adequate sleep.
To plan the tour, I would like to get some basic information from you like the number of students travelling, the departure date, agenda of travel and the tenure of stay.
Hoping to get a positive response from you.
Yours sincerely,
John William
Comments
Dear Sir/Madam,
Dear Sir/Madam,
I hope that you are doing fine. I am writing to you with regards to the journey that is planned to visit Jordan in the first three days next week which I am encouraging my son to participate. Also, I am thinkning of joining your group during this trip.
Jordan is a perfect choice as it is a wonderful country which is locate in the heart of the middle east. I have been there for more than five times recently, therefore, I am familiar with pretty much all cities and famous places. That is being said, my job as a professional tour guide will facilitate any complication that you may arise within the visit.
I think that I can build up a tour plan for our visit that most of the students will fall in love unless you have already parepared one. Furthermore, I can recommend some places for outdoor activities so that students can get out of the buses and stretch their muscles with some games on the way. Take cops and robbers as an example for energetic an joyfull game.
With regard to the tour description that we recieved yesterday, what kind of transportation facility will be used? I recommend usinng Grey Hound buses because they have just launched a new fleet with brand new vehicles. Another question that comes into my mind is what is the breakdown of the fees that each students pays? I have a feeling that something is wrong. If I travel by economy airplane, it will be just as equal as the amount stated in the fees.
I look forward for joining you in this trip soon.
Yours Faithfully,
Kareem Jaradat
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ld like to nominate myself for this. I have two main reasons that are strong e...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, moreover, so, in addition, you know
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 39.0 32.9175257732 118% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 26.3917525773 114% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1048.0 937.175257732 112% => OK
No of words: 226.0 206.0 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63716814159 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87727950738 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47863452363 2.54303337028 97% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 127.690721649 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606194690265 0.622605031667 97% => OK
syllable_count: 320.4 290.88556701 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.0227579025 44.8134815571 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2727272727 76.5299724578 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5454545455 16.8248392259 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54545454545 4.34317383033 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 7.41237113402 148% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154918336267 0.216113520407 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0571175162947 0.0766984524023 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589545966056 0.0603063233224 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0854388328961 0.12726935374 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0607583237792 0.0580467560999 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 8.37731958763 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 70.7449484536 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 8.71597938144 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 41.2886597938 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.