Shopping is now one of the most popular forms of leisure activity in many countries for young adults.Why is this?
Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
In the recent years, shopping has become one of the favorite past time activity. Today, youngsters perceive it as a hobby, rather than necessity. I believe that this is completely a negative development, and in this essay I will support my views with examples.
One problem associated with youth who pursue shopping as a leisure activity is that it wastes a lot of money. These youngsters, especially college goers, are completely dependent on the limited pocket money, which they receive from their parents. Consequently, teenagers, who tend to shop in their free time are left insolvent at the end, and eventually, they end up borrowing money from their friends. For example, students residing in hostels or as paying guests, loan money from their room-mates, on failing to repay this, they get involved in altercations or fights. If these juveniles continue to spend extravagantly on shopping, they may turn out to be insolvent and may be buried under huge debts.
Another drawback, which proves that it is a negative development is that these students are unable to apply themselves to studies. Most of them, misspend their study-time, either browsing through the internet or roaming in the shopping centers, eventually, they hardly get any time to study. To illustrate, in a survey conducted in “The Youth Today”, it was reported that around 48% of youngsters scored poor grades in examinations owing to this leisure interest. If these children continue to spend most of their time in shopping, they won’t be able to achieve their goals. These adolescents should priorities their activities and work on it generously.
In conclusion, I concur that considering shopping as a hobby is purely a detrimental development, as it involves a huge cost, which is unaffordable by teens and it wastes a lot of their time, resulting in poor grades and anti-social behavior.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: pastime
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, if, may, so, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 24.0651302605 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1525.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16949152542 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92857422123 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576271186441 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 463.5 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.0448178241 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.928571429 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0714285714 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78571428571 7.06120827912 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147444352804 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0535519549107 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0445856044596 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0948981363693 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0359213279819 0.056905535591 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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