Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go. Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:Say why you would like to go on the tripSuggest wha

Essay topics:

Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go. Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:

Say why you would like to go on the trip

Suggest what you could do to help during the trip

Ask other questions about the trip

Dear Mrs. Anna,

I am writing in connection with the parental assistance required on the School Trip. As my Kid told me, that his school is taking him on a three-day school trip to another country.

Though, My work schedule is always busy as I am a doctor, So I am unable to spend much time with my kid, that is one of the reasons why I want to volunteer for the trip.

Although I have already mentioned above my profession, I would like to explain that being a doctor, I would be of great help to take care of children in the trip in case any kid feel sick with the changing atmosphere or any other such situation.

However, I have several queries to ask hope you do not mind replying.

When will we be leaving for the trip and what will be the returning date?

Are there any additional charges, that I need to pay In case you accept my offer of going on the trip.

I would be grateful if you could reply to my letter, I will look forward to hearing from you.

Yours Sincerely

Jenny Mathew

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Mrs. Anna, I am writing in connection with the pare...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 837.0 937.175257732 89% => OK
No of words: 191.0 206.0 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.38219895288 4.54256449028 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71756304063 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33334051253 2.54303337028 92% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.61780104712 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 249.3 290.88556701 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.8082283095 44.8134815571 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0 76.5299724578 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2222222222 16.8248392259 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.33333333333 4.34317383033 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.29896907216 163% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237335477743 0.216113520407 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0835437099222 0.0766984524023 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0529885618182 0.0603063233224 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0976307930789 0.12726935374 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0583443319628 0.0580467560999 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 8.37731958763 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 70.7449484536 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 7.45979381443 106% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.12 8.71597938144 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 7.59969072165 93% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 41.2886597938 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 8.62886597938 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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