Your family is going to move to another town Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son In the letter explain why you would like your son to attend this school describe his past academic achievements describe his

Essay topics:

Your family is going to move to another town. Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son. In the letter:
• explain why you would like your son to attend this school
• describe his past academic achievements
• describe his current interests

Dear Sir,
I am Shreyas Parab, IAS government officer, and I transferred to the Mira-Bhayander region for the next ten years of my service. I am writing to request you for granting admission to my son, who has recently passed 2nd grade from Ryan International School, Nagpur.
Since St. Xaviers High School comes under the same group as Ryan International, I guess there won't be any transfer issues. As the curriculum is similar, it would be better for my child to cope with the studies.
My son's name is Akshay Parab; he is brilliant with his academic records. He has recently cleared the Maths Olympiad Grade I exam as well with the Grade A+. Moreover, he is an active sportsperson, has represented his school football team at district level winning glories for the team and personal achievements.
He would like to continue the same passion for football and also to clear the competitive exams as per his intelligence.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully,
Shreyas Parab

Votes
Average: 6.4 (2 votes)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, look, moreover, so, well, i guess

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 32.9175257732 64% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 26.3917525773 64% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 831.0 937.175257732 89% => OK
No of words: 169.0 206.0 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91715976331 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60555127546 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87548395386 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 127.690721649 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.662721893491 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 243.9 290.88556701 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7720492495 44.8134815571 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.1 76.5299724578 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9 16.8248392259 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.9 4.34317383033 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144902374214 0.216113520407 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0584156738003 0.0766984524023 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0444678458898 0.0603063233224 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.06422357268 0.12726935374 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0236659407369 0.0580467560999 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 8.37731958763 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 70.7449484536 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 8.71597938144 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 7.59969072165 114% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 41.2886597938 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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