You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child Write a letter to the parents In your letter Explain why you would like the job Give details of why you would

Essay topics:

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.
Write a letter to the parents. In your letter
• Explain why you would like the job.
• Give details of why you would be suitable person to employ
• Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

Dear Sir or Madam,
I came across the advertisement in Australia Job Seekers Magazine, where you are looking for the person to look after your family and a six-year-old child.
I am doing my graduation at Sydney University and will be applying for a Masters next summer, which is six months from now. These six months, I am willing to write a thesis on one of my projects. Since I live alone, it is quite depressing; it would be a great opportunity if I get this job to keep my mind engage along with getting paid. Since our background is from the same nation, it will also make me feel like at home.
During graduation, I use to work part-time in daycares, I have hands-on experience how to deal with small kids, what are their likes and dislikes and how to keep them occupied, along with I can also be helpful to your old parents to do a shopping and other daily chores.
During my free time, I can work on my project and continue preparation for my masters.
I am hoping for positive feedback from your side.
Thanks and Regards,
Shreyas Parab

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 22, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...eel like at home. During graduation, I use to work part-time in daycares, I have h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 862.0 937.175257732 92% => OK
No of words: 193.0 206.0 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.46632124352 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72725689877 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55516599428 2.54303337028 100% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 127.690721649 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.663212435233 0.622605031667 107% => OK
syllable_count: 268.2 290.88556701 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 1.44329896907 346% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.0884207125 44.8134815571 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.7777777778 76.5299724578 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4444444444 16.8248392259 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 4.34317383033 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238327373881 0.216113520407 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0842066858671 0.0766984524023 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0849869148008 0.0603063233224 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13053281825 0.12726935374 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107543339717 0.0580467560999 185% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 8.37731958763 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 70.7449484536 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.65 8.71597938144 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 7.59969072165 105% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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