Your-have a full-time job and are also doing a part-time evening course. You naive find that you cannot continue the course.Write a letter to your neighbours.In your letter-describe the situation-explain why you cannot continue at this time-say what actio

Essay topics:

Your-have a full-time job and are also doing a part-time evening course. You naive find that you cannot continue the course.
Write a letter to your neighbours.
In your letter
-describe the situation
-explain why you cannot continue at this time
-say what action you would like to take

Dear Sir,

Let me take the opportunity to share with you regarding my current unbalanced situation, created because of the clashes between my work schedule and the evening MBA course. if you remember, I am in a full time employment contract with one of the leading news broadcasting channel and after discussing with you I have requested my supervisor to give me morning shift with weekly holiday on Tuesday. but I have heard the notice that the weekly seminar has been moved to Monday which means that I will need to attend the class from 2 PM on that day if I want to pass the exam. but unfortunately, all the program plans are has been finalised and according to the company policy I am not allowed change the day off before completion of six months.

I may mention that I have tried my best to find a solution by giving a formal ply to my boss, but there is nothing that can be done now. As matter of fact, I will not be able to continue the course successfully on this semester.

At this situation, I would like you to help me to withdraw the courses I am taking on this summer session. I will enroll again on the spring to pass on this two subjects.

Sincerely,
Shahla

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir, Let me take the opportunity to share wit...
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Line 3, column 174, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...rk schedule and the evening MBA course. if you remember, I am in a full time emplo...
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Line 3, column 201, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
... MBA course. if you remember, I am in a full time employment contract with one of the lea...
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Line 3, column 399, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...g shift with weekly holiday on Tuesday. but I have heard the notice that the weekly...
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Line 3, column 575, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...on that day if I want to pass the exam. but unfortunately, all the program plans ar...
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Line 3, column 744, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ay off before completion of six months. I may mention that I have tried my best ...
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Line 5, column 230, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e course successfully on this semester. At this situation, I would like you to h...
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Line 7, column 172, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he spring to pass on this two subjects. Sincerely, Shahla
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Line 9, column 11, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ss on this two subjects. Sincerely, Shahla
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Line 10, column 7, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s two subjects. Sincerely, Shahla
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, regarding, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 32.9175257732 100% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 26.3917525773 136% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 972.0 937.175257732 104% => OK
No of words: 219.0 206.0 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.43835616438 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84690116678 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56212808485 2.54303337028 101% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 127.690721649 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.62100456621 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 300.6 290.88556701 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.463917525773 647% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 16.3608247423 165% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.8093444532 44.8134815571 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.5 76.5299724578 159% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.375 16.8248392259 163% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.375 4.34317383033 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 2.54639175258 393% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148058003319 0.216113520407 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0499031894052 0.0766984524023 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.045018959145 0.0603063233224 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0907199389424 0.12726935374 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0239241107824 0.0580467560999 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 8.37731958763 158% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 70.7449484536 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 7.45979381443 154% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.77 8.71597938144 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 7.59969072165 105% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 8.62886597938 209% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.8 8.54432989691 150% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 8.15463917526 159% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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