your local museum has asked for feedback on your recent visit Write to museum tell them what you liked and what you didn t like make some suggestion for improvement describe some other exhibits you would like to see

Essay topics:

your local museum has asked for feedback on your recent visit. Write to museum

tell them what you liked and what you didn't like.

make some suggestion for improvement

describe some other exhibits you would like to see

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am Navdeep Puri , dweller of Huston Street New York U.S.A, penning down this epistle to provide you feedback about my visit to museum. Gadly, I got stunned by watching its massive interior designs , rare collection of antique weapons, paintings, wax statues of great freedom fighters but I did not like its 3D theatre.

Although curators of museum has taken their die-hard efforts to make it modern museum, there were countless glitches in 3D shows. First of all, please install the best quality of digital equipment as the video and audio were not so much clear. Moreover, the seats were not comfortable, thus it was impossible for visitors to enjoy the show.

Even though your museum endows plethora of information on different subjects, you should provide more information on other gigantic and flabbergasting inventions such as aircraft, jets, planes. It would be highly appreciable if you hire some exceptionally talented professional who would narrate antique things in a lucid manner to audience.

Thanking for your kind consideration in my feedback

Yours faithfully,
JOhn

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 18, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
Dear Sir or Madam, I am Navdeep Puri , dweller of Huston Street New York U.S.A...
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Line 3, column 59, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: A
..., dweller of Huston Street New York U.S.A, penning down this epistle to provide y...
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Line 3, column 199, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...by watching its massive interior designs , rare collection of antique weapons, pai...
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Line 7, column 312, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a lucid manner" with adverb for "lucid"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...sional who would narrate antique things in a lucid manner to audience. Thanking for your kind ...
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Line 12, column 5, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n my feedback Yours faithfully, JOhn
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, so, thus, well, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 32.9175257732 55% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 943.0 937.175257732 101% => OK
No of words: 177.0 206.0 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32768361582 4.54256449028 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64748333727 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80938383959 2.54303337028 110% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 127.690721649 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.785310734463 0.622605031667 126% => OK
syllable_count: 274.5 290.88556701 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 38.0704527817 44.8134815571 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.875 76.5299724578 154% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.125 16.8248392259 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.875 4.34317383033 181% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262044697283 0.216113520407 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.088265367228 0.0766984524023 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0516811325807 0.0603063233224 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131538361087 0.12726935374 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0400632206585 0.0580467560999 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 8.37731958763 175% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 70.7449484536 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 7.45979381443 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 8.71597938144 156% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.35 7.59969072165 136% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 41.2886597938 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 8.62886597938 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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