Countries becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
It is true that thanks to global trade, people can purchase the same products wherever they live. Although this trend has some benefits, I would argue that this change is more likely to have a harmful impact.
On the one hand, there are a range of plausible reasons why this development can be positive. First and foremost is that it is convenient for citizens to buy products, especially busy people. An excellent example of this is that with only their home computer or mobile phone, buyers can make a purchase of useful books through the website of Amazon. Another point worth mentioning is that from an economic perspective, this trend may encourage people’s shopping. Obviously, the increasing competitiveness between companies can lead to the development of products which fulfill customer needs with competitive price.
On the other hand, I believe that these benefits are outweighed be the drawbacks. Firstly, from a cultural perspective, globalization may cause the disappearance of many traditions and as a result, there will be a decrease in global cultural diversity. An illustration of this is that in Viet Nam, citizens wear the same clothes such as jeans and T-shirt, rather than traditional costumes. Secondly, if customers do not buy goods via the Internet, they can easily test the quality of products in order to avoid taking the faulty products. It is undeniable that many companies may plead economic gains for producing and selling goods which are defective, even unhealthy to residents.
In conclusion, it seems to me that the potential demerits of this revolution are more significant than the possible benefits.
Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'firstly', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'as a result', 'it is true', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.247457627119 0.247107548796 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.135593220339 0.15552993741 87% => OK
Adjectives: 0.101694915254 0.0946569551029 107% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0338983050847 0.0437536398559 77% => OK
Prepositions: 0.132203389831 0.122223957237 108% => OK
Participles: 0.0169491525424 0.0403219363162 42% => More participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.90868257434 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0237288135593 0.0326786765898 73% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.11186440678 0.0861751148067 130% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0338983050847 0.0214082191602 158% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0135593220339 0.0119246538136 114% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1646.0 1933.38276553 85% => OK
No of words: 265.0 316.052104208 84% => OK
Chars per words: 6.18796992481 6.10592293882 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20519365927 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.369811320755 0.37474360046 99% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.309433962264 0.284197041944 109% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.249056603774 0.203843217982 122% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.166037735849 0.137313986986 121% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90868257434 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615094339623 0.560935902166 110% => OK
Word variations: 66.814187192 60.7401812628 110% => OK
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0911823647 81% => OK
Sentence length: 20.3846153846 20.7725350517 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.2170760878 49.5273876611 55% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.9712230216 93.4120437189 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.3920863309 15.2821509519 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.561151079137 0.594174754866 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.39078156313 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01102204409 0% => OK
Readability: 51.328011611 49.1922392462 104% => OK
Elegance: 1.91803278689 1.69127372897 113% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Topic essay coherence: 0.306425953164 0.332604825255 92% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0614976120947 0.102734651613 60% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0334193263545 0.0668474354756 50% => Sentences are so close to each other.
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.530425122224 0.534917948617 99% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.166129720257 0.148666948902 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124625298105 0.13441755203 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452490563247 0.0742828286743 61% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.338941627886 0.324241079732 105% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0409663966138 0.0640056729886 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208900233776 0.22793763319 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00804642531228 0.0582452615562 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.68436873747 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => OK
sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.41883767535 88% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 5.88977955912 102% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.60220440882 77% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.00200400802 50% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 9.0 10.493987976 86% => OK
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Rates: 76.9230769231 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: 7.0 Out of 9