In most countries prison is the most common solution when people commit a crime.
However, if they were to receive better education, it could prevent them from becoming criminals.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Traditionally, as a solution to control crime, prison has been in use. Nevertheless, there are many ways to prevent the crime from happening. Some would argue that uneducated people commit more crime so education could possibly prevent illegal activities, but I would say that along with education, employment opportunities should be provided. In this essay, I shall examine how education as well as employment could help.
To begin with, illiterates indulge in antisocial activities because they lack in discipline. To illustrate, at the school level, young children are being taught about moral values along with academics that could help their surroundings and families. However, when it comes to uneducated youngsters, they do not know the impact of the crime which they commit. As a result, we do see most of the crimes committed by people who lack education.
In addition, People who are unemployed indulge in illegal activities for their survival. This jobless people often involve in crime for monetary benefits. To illustrate, Brazil, a country with poor economy and in recession at the moment, has been in the top for the most dangerous place to live. Due to unemployment, People there trade illegal drugs and also kill others for money. Had there been a proper government providing employment prospects to people, crime rate would have been in control.
To conclude, education is one of the most effective solutions along with employment opportunities to prevent a person becoming criminal. So, every government should focus on providing education and job to its people to avoid immoral activities.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'nevertheless', 'so', 'well', 'in addition', 'as a result', 'as well as', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.243986254296 0.247107548796 99% => OK
Verbs: 0.168384879725 0.15552993741 108% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0721649484536 0.0946569551029 76% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0446735395189 0.0501201869031 89% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0343642611684 0.0437536398559 79% => OK
Prepositions: 0.127147766323 0.122223957237 104% => OK
Participles: 0.0412371134021 0.0403219363162 102% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.89349255992 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0446735395189 0.0326786765898 137% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0618556701031 0.0861751148067 72% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0309278350515 0.0214082191602 144% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.020618556701 0.0119246538136 173% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1690.0 1933.38276553 87% => OK
No of words: 256.0 316.052104208 81% => More words wanted.
Chars per words: 6.57587548638 6.10592293882 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20519365927 95% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.3828125 0.37474360046 102% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.296875 0.284197041944 104% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.21484375 0.203843217982 105% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.1875 0.137313986986 137% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89349255992 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60546875 0.560935902166 108% => OK
Word variations: 64.0157751106 60.7401812628 105% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0911823647 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0666666667 20.7725350517 82% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.7518608684 49.5273876611 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.5424354244 93.4120437189 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.1697416974 15.2821509519 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.553505535055 0.594174754866 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.39078156313 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01102204409 100% => OK
Readability: 46.7541666667 49.1922392462 95% => OK
Elegance: 1.66666666667 1.69127372897 99% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Topic essay coherence: 0.359438092395 0.332604825255 108% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0921199304412 0.102734651613 90% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0354122421665 0.0668474354756 53% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.504697152486 0.534917948617 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.101639160507 0.148666948902 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132512389482 0.13441755203 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0607360221468 0.0742828286743 82% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.24398382958 0.324241079732 75% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0241295708017 0.0640056729886 38% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235840929775 0.22793763319 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0307339951152 0.0582452615562 53% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.68436873747 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.9879759519 301% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.41883767535 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 3.0 5.88977955912 51% => OK
Negative topic words: 9.0 2.60220440882 346% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.00200400802 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 12.0 10.493987976 114% => OK
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Rates: 78.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: 7.0 Out of 9