1 Many companies sponsor sports as a way of advertising themselves Some people think this is good for the world of sport while others think it is negative Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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1. Many companies sponsor sports as a way of advertising themselves. Some people think this is good for the world of sport, while others think it is negative. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

These days, the majority of commercial corporation invest in sports as the stragetegy to advertise their manufactor.This situation exerts two ambivalent pointviews which some part of people believe it is negative and others don't feel any concern in it. In my perspective, this operation regard as an win-win relationship and influenced positively to each other.
Sponsorship of proffesional sport club or athletics play a crucial part in throughout their enterprise. For instance, company ordinarily supply them some particular gadgets such as sport tool, nutrient product , .... which is a radical platform for their triumph. In futher cases, investing in sport contribute to modify sport to a job which generate occupy oppoturnity for the array of athletes. To illustrate, sport used to merely consider as a entertaiment or health practice method until people have applied monetary for helding tournament and sponsor for athletics which redefine sport as a occupy.
In advataged aspect of company sposoring to sport, they are able to advertise their manufacture legally . One of specific evidence of this advantage is the big scale contract between Christian Ronaldo one of the legend of world soccer and Nike one of the biggest company in sneaker market.To widespread their product relying on Christian's reputation , they have to supply him all of their premier soccer shoes .However the income from every single product ultilizing by Ronaldo are significant.
however , it exist a controversy that those sponsorship are deteriating inherent sportmanship.Many people reckon that modern sport are gradually become materialistic which athletics playing their match for money.
To conclude, sponsorship in sport making progressive effect to both company and world sport platform although it has some ambivalences correlating to sportmanship.

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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
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Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1567.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.67753623188 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10766436276 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630434782609 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
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Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.1641875459 49.4020404114 185% => OK
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Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 28.0 5.01903807615 558% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
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Sentence topic coherence: 0.109077885625 0.084324248473 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539539255411 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150499870297 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0541152096555 0.056905535591 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 50.2224549098 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.96 12.4159519038 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.71 8.58950901804 125% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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