Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible.
Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Every peole in the world are chosing domestic method for working for studying relying on some significant advance that the internet bring namely as convinience, cheap price, long-distance connection. In my perspective , while this situation has influenced practially to the world, it still eixits some incidents.
To begin with, the internet are becoming an indispensable human operation tools which interfere many domains in life insisting of education, professional management,... In academy section , the majority of modern schools are gradually superseding their education system by technology because of its efficiency such as easy taking , reasonable price, easy connecting.For instance , it is now popular to see that student can able to receive and apply their homework from home by the internet .In some cases , they can study through education software systemizing by their school . In economical aspect, international organizations mostly supervise their chain of company or restaurant by online management system as for managing working operation globally .
In the back of the coin, this situation also exert some disadvantages . One of the extreme problem is the upswing number of cybercrime. These crime usually target to working network in some companies for robbing information.regarding to education, taking advanced in techonology to teaching can bring back to some detrimental consequences especially namely as reduction of education quality. To illustrate, the comprehension ablity of student while studying in school is absolutely better than those studying at home through electric techonology . In addition , it contains many potential distraction when study at home .
To conclude, while studying and working from home by technology have some detrimental impact, we can not deny its innovation to our life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, regarding, so, still, while, as for, for instance, in addition, such as, in some cases, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.3376753507 264% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1555.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.78066914498 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.29594486468 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.620817843866 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 95.3485125368 49.4020404114 193% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.363636364 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4545454545 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0909090909 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.01903807615 398% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193115202497 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0701959687095 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0446636211266 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122143595406 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0221837843636 0.056905535591 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 21.74 50.2224549098 43% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.54 12.4159519038 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.23 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 9.78957915832 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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