1 Q Art and musics should not be mandatory at school agree disagree

Essay topics:

1. Q : Art and musics should not be mandatory at school, agree/disagree?

It is argued that in schools, art and music should not be compulsory. In my opinion, I completely disagree with this statement, because these subjects are helpful for students to enhance their academic performance and help them to overcome stress.

Firstly, art undoubtedly plays an important role in the development of creative thinking. when students express their ideas and thoughts through artwork, it increases their confidence as well as academic performance. On the other hand, when they learn something through artistic means, like drawing a picture or writing a song, the information is embedded in their minds for a long time. Recent research shows that students who study art are 4 times more likely to be recognized for academic achievement and 3 times more likely to be awarded for school attendance. Music and other art courses are important for making students perform better academically.

In recent times many students face study pressure . As, in many schools, teachers give more importance to maths and science subjects, as a result, it affects the mental health of candidates. If drawing, the painting will introduce in educational institutes, it helps students to spent time something that’s not related to perfection. Research shows that south Korea have more suicide rate of students because they are not able to study art courses. In order to fit mentally, students have to take music and drawing courses.
In conclusion, art and music at school are significantly important for better student’s performance as well as it is the best way for students to unwind their stress.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, so, well, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1359.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 257.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28793774319 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83453139603 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 176.041082164 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568093385214 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 410.4 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4698988425 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.538461538 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7692307692 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.84615384615 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18016973331 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0733234787535 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.094092039747 0.0667982634062 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12831171938 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0572474709219 0.056905535591 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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