For a long time art has been considered an essential part of all cultures in the world. However, nowadays people’s values have changed, and we tend to consider science, technology and business more important than arts.
What do you think are the causes of this?
What can be done to draw people’s attention to art?
Art has always played an integral role in forming and nurturing cultures around the world. Nowadays, people have placed more emphasis on practical subjects than on art. This is mainly because difficulty finding jobs in art-related fields and most people find art is boring.
Firstly, the reason one lacks interest in art is that they were participating in something that didn’t appeal to them so much. As a result, they are going for something that gives them instant joy such as playing video games on smartphones and watching movies on Netflix rather than staring around in a museum. Secondly, more and more people are choosing a career in science and information technology than art and music because these practical fields provide a wide variety of employment compare to art. In consequences, many sculptor, architects, and musicians lose interest in their fields because a lack of opportunities.
There are two effective solutions for giving importance to art like past years. one way is to Make painting, drawing, and sculpture more meaningful because understanding art is the key to curing all kinds of disinterest towards them. Moreover, people can easily relate to these art pieces that encourage will people to spend their leisure time in art galleries more than surfing the internet. Another method the authorities should introduce high pay job opportunities for an art worker. So, in that way, people will not merely seek a practical career but their interest starts drawing toward art fields.
In conclusion, representing meaningful art and providing career opportunities to art workers will definitely draw people's attention toward art than particle fields.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1415.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31954887218 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81233412775 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.609022556391 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 431.1 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.7329451266 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.846153846 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4615384615 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07692307692 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280570117435 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110956474291 0.084324248473 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0594923132025 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18869685559 0.151304729494 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0461266567862 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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