10. Many countries invest money to prepare competitors to join top competitions like Olympic
Game and the World Cup. It is necessary to offer money to encourage children to exercise.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
ee?
Over the past decades, the children’s well-being has never ceased to draw public attention and provoke debates. Although governments are investing a numerous of money to pull children to exercise in order to join in international competitions like Olympic game and the World Cup, the issue as to whether this trend should be positive or negative remain controversial. From my own perspective, this approach is reasonable because of following reasons.
Firstly, it is important to recognize that encouraging children to exercise would improve significantly their health. In fact, with the development of technology in this society, children have been spending a lot of time on playing computer games or watching TVs, that inactivity life style could bring numbers of potential risk like obesity or heart attack. So that, more investment in exercise could be able to avoid those people from this sedentary life. For example, building more sport fields and setting up scholarships for these positive young sport participants could make exercise to be more attractive.
Secondly, it is equally important to recognize that spending more money could cultivate a lot of potential sportsman. some may argue that students who waste too much time on playing sport should be distracted from their main tasks is learning. This argument could be true to some extent. However, they should take into account the fact that discovering children who have talent on one kind of sport is very crucial in order to develop national sport background. These people could be professional athletes achieving prizes in great competitions in future. Therefore, the more money is spent to encourage children to exercise, the more potential and competitive athletes.
In conclusion, in my opinion, governments should invest more money to motivating children do sport activities. Not only improve children’s health condition, but also promising talent sportsman as mentioned above.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, as to, for example, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1676.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51315789474 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98866018166 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601973684211 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.2855004173 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.733333333 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2666666667 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153514158152 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0567981357684 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635035901798 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105764711962 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0360923523203 0.056905535591 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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