13/6/2015: With many problems of transport and accommodation in cities, some governments are encouraging businesses to move to rural areas. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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13/6/2015: With many problems of transport and accommodation in cities, some governments are encouraging businesses to move to rural areas. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

It is comprehensible that some local authorities commit to relocating the economic regions to rural areas because of several controversial issues from infrastructure and traffic overload in the inner cities. Although there are a handful of drawbacks in this case, I strongly claim that the advantages still surpass the disadvantages.

On the one hand, there are two prime reasons for the situation that governments should transfer economic areas from metropolises to the countryside. Firstly, accompanying with the prosperity of socio-economy, the mushrooming of many skyscrapers and buildings has become a problematic issue of nations. Therefore, it may pose a serious threat to the construction structure of the cities without the government’s attention. Secondly, citizens in big cities may feel frustrated due to the vigorous growth of vehicles such as private cars or mass transit. Hanoi perfectly exemplifies this circumstance, metropolitans have to suffer from traffic congestion everyday which leads to the recession of work quality.

On the other hand, in spite of the fact that this relocation may make a breakthrough in the improvement of urban traffic, there are still weaknesses in some aspects. One of them is that the politicians may invest a significant amount of money to implement this plan. As a result, the government budget will be the most vulnerable to financial burden because this campaign comprises a host of potential risks as well as the price is extremely exorbitant. Additionally, workers have to travel further distances than before and it may exert a negative effect to their working time. For instance, if people move too far to work, their personal time will be jeopardized which result in various issues such as stress or accidents. Consequently, these improvements will receive criticism for carrying out from both office workers and enterprises.

To conclude, many people are skeptical the effectiveness of transferring economic zones from inner cities to rural areas but I wholly believe that the benefits still outperform the drawbacks.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 230, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'handfuls', 'handsful'?
Suggestion: handfuls; handsful
... the inner cities. Although there are a handful of drawbacks in this case, I strongly c...
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Line 3, column 658, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... have to suffer from traffic congestion everyday which leads to the recession of work qu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, for instance, such as, as a result, as well as, in spite of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1768.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49068322981 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2407542841 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608695652174 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.0254993671 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.285714286 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0 7.06120827912 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114731106113 0.244688304435 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0367685628966 0.084324248473 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0248043196663 0.0667982634062 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0710080847783 0.151304729494 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.021357165604 0.056905535591 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.07 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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