24. Nowadays a large amount of advertising is aimed at children. Some people think this can
have negative effects on children and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or
disagree?
Over the past decades, the real influence of advertisement on children has never ceased to draw public attention and provoke debates. Although the perquisite of any successful advertisement is the general public, the issue as to whether governments should censor unsuitable content or not remain controversial. In my opinion, imposing censorship on advertising is necessary.
On the one hand, it is important to recognize that commercial seem likely provide some benefits to audiences. Children who love watching TVs programs because of its entertaining values, are the main target of advertisement producers. As a result, advertisings are made carefully and conscientiously could bring happiness to little customer when watching them. Moreover, advertisement could provide to their customer, especially young parents, plenty of choice to choose from different products. So that, these parents could clearly understand what their children needs and like to have. For example, in many families, the old usually watch advertisement to choose goods like toys, books which have positive effective on personally and intelligently development of their children. Therefore, the benefits of commercial should never be neglected.
On the other hand, some may argue that advertisements which have violent content are chef culprit of erratic behavior pattern in children. It is undeniable that these form of programs are inappropriate to little customers. For example, children who are in tender, vulnerable ages, are prone to imitate character in advertising, that could lead to unexpected accident and put them in danger. This example indicates that advertisement have far-reaching influence on characteristic development of young people. Therefore, censorship is advised to be implement.
In conclusion, under no circumstance should media watchdogs let commercial industry at the mercy of the market. Censorship could be imposed in order to prevent children from unexpected situation as mentioned above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 198, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
... of any successful advertisement is the general public, the issue as to whether governments sh...
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Line 1, column 224, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...sement is the general public, the issue as to whether governments should censor unsuitable co...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, moreover, so, therefore, as to, for example, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1707.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.80612244898 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23071423397 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612244897959 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.4929778344 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.411764706 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2941176471 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.70588235294 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200388636602 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0600181965792 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0289863268552 0.0667982634062 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118273052491 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0155411108218 0.056905535591 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 50.2224549098 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.12 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.47 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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