28. Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later. Some people think that
they are the best people to talk to school students the danger of committing a crime. To
what extent do you agree or disagree?
Over the past decades, crime education has never ceased to draw public attention and provoke debates. Although educating about the danger of law-offending for high students is very important, the issue as to whether people who have been in prison could be the best speaker or not remain controversial. From my perspective, there are better alternatives for this problem.
On the one hand, many may argue that students could aware of the consequences of criminal activities when attending a talk given by ex-prisoner. this argument could be true to some extent. In fact, these ex-criminals are real example that people have to pay for their unlawful activities. Their life stories are usually vivid and persuasive that attract the attention of young people easily. For example, in Vietnam, TV programs which introduce about the life in jail have been gained amount of successful. this example indicates that experience of ex-prisoners are very useful to avoid the young from breaking the laws.
On the other hand, it is important to recognize that combination different education method will bring more positive influence than just attending a talk of former prisoner. it is undeniable that, parents and school play a crucial role in raising awareness of children about crime. Home and school environmental have a profound effective on the development of children. For instance, in some developing countries with a good moral curriculum at school have lower rate of juvenile crime than others. Therefore, the adults should play take proactive action educating children about social evils and how to avoid them.
In conclusion, talking all of the above-mentioned fact into account, it is my opinion that a talk given by ex-prisoner, albeit effective, is not the best method for crime education.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 203, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...h students is very important, the issue as to whether people who have been in prison could be...
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Line 3, column 18, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun may seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much may', 'a good deal of may'.
Suggestion: much may; a good deal of may
...s for this problem. On the one hand, many may argue that students could aware of the ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
... attending a talk given by ex-prisoner. this argument could be true to some extent. ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
... have been gained amount of successful. this example indicates that experience of ex...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...st attending a talk of former prisoner. it is undeniable that, parents and school ...
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Line 7, column 24, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...o avoid them. In conclusion, talking all of the above-mentioned fact into account, it i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, therefore, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1515.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2787456446 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87963442665 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616724738676 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.404070202 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.0 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1333333333 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220271864643 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0653278805189 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0542517111605 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121452426885 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0332152199361 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.