Advances in technology and automation have reduced the need for manual labour.Therefore working hours should be reduced.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, advance technologies involve in most part of our life more than past. They facilitate most of our jobs. They help us to do our duty quick and accurate. Many people like me believe that by using advance new technology we don’t need to do a lot of handy work as previous so we can reduce the employees’ working hours.

To begin with, in the past most of jobs especially paper work should be done by labor. For example in a bank, when a cashier wont to do a customer payment request, he/she should check a book to identify the customer, another books to check previous payment and customer stock and so on. It may take more than 15 minute to move to the next request but today all these work can do in less than 1 minute – with regard of machinery and computerization. It is obvious that by using these advanced technologies an employee can do more jobs than previous in unit of time. So he/she has extra time and finally we can decrease of working hours.

Furthermore, based on new researches decreasing working hours with using new development technologies have a lot of other benefits. For example new results show labor health and performance in doing assigned jobs increases significantly if they spent more times with their families, friends and contribute more in social activities.

To sum up, based on my opinion advances in machinery, especially in last century, open new window in our life. They help us to do hard and time-consume jobs faster and careful and as a result we can decrease employees’ working time. This lead to some other benefits for our society like labor better performance and life style.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 28, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the jobs') or simply say ''most jobs''.
Suggestion: most of the jobs; most jobs
...ng hours. To begin with, in the past most of jobs especially paper work should be done by...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, furthermore, if, may, so, for example, as a result, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 13.1623246493 15% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1368.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78321678322 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7922245911 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559440559441 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 432.9 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.9086817503 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.7142857143 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4285714286 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42857142857 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17403897083 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0614956839169 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0395702711261 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108492481656 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0306500273335 0.056905535591 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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