Advances in technology and automation have reduced the need for manual labour. Therefore, working hours should be reduced. To what extent do you agree?
Twenty years ago, labour was used as major categories of working. Rapid speed of the development of various machines in the era of technology has gradually replaced the manual work, which makes some people have thought of decreasing time-working of worker. Personally, both machines and working by hands play equally indispensable roles as follows.
On the one hand, thanks to technology, machines are able to increase more merchandises consumed by purchaser than them made by manual job. To begin with, there are many similarities among products in quality, shape and composition, in particular, during the producer process, every goods is carefully calculated to create most accurate details which are utilised to eventually put together component elements. In the other words, a modern toaster with a good method will give you a delicious bread. Next, there is an irrefutable fact that technology urges work to raise its productivity. According to some researches, it proves that while automatic printers take only two minutes to make ten clear copies of document, hand-writing is not only time-consuming but also illegible, as a result, manual work is not as much vital as it in the past, which suggests that workers don't essentially work overtime in the near future.
On the other hand, some majors are incapable of being accomplished without the help of people. Given the fact that some sorts of blue-collar jobs require human's cleverness such as pottery-making, sculpture and so on. As far as I know, when producing an pottery, artists do with their experience and meticulousness which has significant impact on its. In addition, like drawing, we need creation and breakthroughs , which makes me believe that machines can not replace people in some cases.
To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that although advances in technology and automation can minimize the working hours, we are not able to deny the importance of manual job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: delicious bread
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Suggestion: a
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, while, in addition, in particular, such as, as a result, in some cases, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1632.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18095238095 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97739574713 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.647619047619 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.0912659692 49.4020404114 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.538461538 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2307692308 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.46153846154 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154755200294 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0500130134917 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0436517974461 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100209740502 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419612443406 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.84 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.