Advertising campaigns on TV that are targeted at children should be banned.To what extent to you agree or disagree with this opinion?
It is true that we are increasingly surrounded by advertisements that want to stimulate young people to purchase their products. While some people state that some of these are incompatible, I think that they are still useful for children.
On the one hand, it cannot be denied that some of the marketing strategies exert pernicious influence upon youngsters. Firstly, teenagers are now bombarded with too many kinds of adverts, some of which are likely to contain numerous unsuited contents such as sexual or violent images. Secondly, companies are step-by-step commercializing their commodity to entice prospective adolescents by inviting celebrities to publicize their brands. Finally, children put pressure on parents to purchase them things on television.
On the other hand, authorities should not put a ban on these types of adverts for a variety of reasons. The key factor leading to my opinion is that despite their offspring’s demand, parents also choose to buy products not just depending on publicity but also by their qualities. Moreover, there are a great deal of broadcasting propaganda of advantageous learning tools on television. For example, electronic dictionaries and alphabet still play an indispensable role in the development of people who are growing up. Furthermore, governments should control the related problems. To illustrate, they should censor false information on stocks that can be a detriment to people’s health condition such as smoking, unhealthy foods.
In conclusion, although marketing aiming at youngsters sometimes have adverse impacts, I personally believe that they should not be prohibited due to some reasons mentioned above.
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1431.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 255.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.61176470588 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22131501633 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.666666666667 0.561755894193 119% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.4137004211 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.076923077 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6153846154 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.0769230769 7.06120827912 185% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103555453312 0.244688304435 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.032792251953 0.084324248473 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0234822605983 0.0667982634062 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0609211906679 0.151304729494 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0155309503582 0.056905535591 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.26 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.4 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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