Advertising discourages people from being different individuals by making us want to be and to look the same. To what extnet do you agree or disagree?
With the development of advanced technology, advertising has become more popular and had a strong influence on people. Many people believe that ads lead people to buy the same products, thus they easily lose the identity of their own. In my opinion, I partly disagree with this statement.
On the one hand, the rise of advertisements has an impact on their choices, especially buying the same things. Firstly, the influence of advertising is persuading consumers to buy despite being unnecessary for their lives. It often happens in the electronic field. For instance, many people would readily prefer to buy iPhones at expensive prices rather than other brands for the simple reason that is iPhone is more common and fashionable. As a result, the advertisement has stimulated the desire to own an iPhone, but its functions are quite similar to other phones. Moreover, ads make consumers believe that everything in the mass media, such as television, and the Internet is the latest trend. Therefore, people start tending to products advertised to become modern people and fashionable.
On the other hand, advertising cannot make everyone the same because they have different views and interests. Most people want to make them distinct, so it is challenging to change their styles into popular ones. In addition, the ads market is diverse; for example, the same item but with different prices and quality depending on the needs and financial ability of the buyer. Therefore, the last decision depends on spenders, advertisement only plays the role of additional information.
In conclusion, even though the effect of advertising increases significantly, the consumption of people is still difficult to be affected completely. Instead of attracting buyers by advertising, companies should improve the quality of their products.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'changing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: changing
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1541.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35069444444 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9378180646 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597222222222 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.1256485786 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.3125 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.75 7.06120827912 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20635400857 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0621958023676 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437240023624 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120651339089 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0247790705444 0.056905535591 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.45 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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