Amount of increasing the violence on the television, almost people think that the violent scenes affect children's behavior. Do you agree or disagree?
In recent years, technology has been becoming more advanced. There are many different TV shows, films, and advertisements on technology devices. In modern life, children who are easy to be affected by violence on television because children are interested in it. In my perspective, I partially agree with the outlook that this cause a negative impact on children’s behavior. In this essay, I will clarify this argument and provide examples to support my view.
First of all, there are many reasons why the violence on television should be controlled because see an increase in this show. The television is a tool for the human to entertain when they feel stressed and need to relax after a hard-working day and it has a function that a tool for children who interesting with advertisements in many colors and fun. For example, people can watch a television show, film and they can update the latest news everyday with television. Second, nowadays producers always focus on improving their films and shows, those are energetic with action and violence, especially towards the young generation. Because they like action movies and violent scenes so that producers always want to develop about this sign. Finally, the amount of violence on the television sees a growth that has few benefits like it can teach children to protect themselves if they have dangerous problems.
Nevertheless, violence on television can have a negative problem in children’s behavior. For example, if children watch the shows or films related to violence, they will have many actions like the character on the program and tend to violent for people around them because children are in the development phase so they are not capable of understanding the connotations in the film’s message. Because of this reason, the parents need to take care of them and teach them about the actions to avoid actions that cause danger for themselves and the people surrounding them.
In conclusion, although television can help children’s entertainment, however, it has been affected by different negative anything on the television programs. I think to see an increasing amount of violence shows need to control and limited instead of completely prohibited. Because it causes negative effects on the young generation, especially children in the development phase. Besides, parents should pay attention to their children and spend time teaching them should not act as a character on the television and help them to understand the connotation hidden in the film’s message.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, finally, first, however, if, look, nevertheless, second, so, for example, i think, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2137.0 1615.20841683 132% => OK
No of words: 408.0 315.596192385 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23774509804 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91193697087 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473039215686 0.561755894193 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 657.0 506.74238477 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.6727953449 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.722222222 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61111111111 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239237022283 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0808931535715 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0658491742691 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15321169403 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0222574198881 0.056905535591 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.