The government should control the amount of violence in films and on television in order to control violent crimes in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this action?
Because of their prevalence, televisions and films are among those media that are believed to potentially affect, change or mould people's thoughts and behaviours. Media watch dogs suggest that some programmes should be censored so as to curb violence. It is necessary, for the link between violence in media and violence in society is evident.
First of all, violent movies promote heroism and individualism, cajoling people to resolve conflicts through violence, rather that legal consultation. Some action movies have conveyed a notion to the audience, especially teenagers, that a hero can be highly regarde, regardless of the consequence of his behaviour. Audience imitate those role models, in a belief that their behaviour will reap applause from others. In most cases, their actions evolve into violent crimes.
Another category of programmes, war documentaries or crime reports, also opens up the possibility of viewers engaging in violence. Aiming at a high audience rating, TV programmes producers are inclined to broadcast crime reports. Some reports can go so far as to present the whole procedures are law-offending practice, such as robbery, shoplifting, burglary, to mention but a few. Not surprisingly, it functions like a free course from which prospective criminals learn those skills. It contributes to the rise in crime rates and then to the increase in violence that is involved in different kinds of crimes.
As well as those TV shows, action movies have a profound impact on personality development of viewers, leading to their subsequent violence acts. Dominant entertainment media succeed in attracting millions of young viewers every single day. The audience can easily become addicted to TV programmes and tend to be isolated, temperamental and aggressive. They use foul language and employ violence when feeling depressed and estranged. There is no point in denying the fact that the TV is the chief culprit for these emotional disturbances and erratic behaviour patterns.
To summarise, the violence in movies or on television can impact audiences in a variety of ways, and eventually lead to crimes. Therefore, the government should take actions to tackle such a problem and censorship is undoubtedly one of the most effective means.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, then, therefore, well, as to, such as, as well as, first of all, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.3376753507 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1914.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 354.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40677966102 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00082446883 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607344632768 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.093316288 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 100.736842105 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6315789474 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47368421053 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.9879759519 301% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127768742055 0.244688304435 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0372038921376 0.084324248473 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0336255655232 0.0667982634062 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0730819469697 0.151304729494 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0307277690263 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.88 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 78.4519038076 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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