Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible.
Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
In recent times, a growing body of adults and children are embarking on telecommuting as well as online learning by virtue of the accessibility and affordability of current technology. Even though this growing trend can be beneficial to our environment, I deem that it does more harm than good to each individuals.
On the one hand, the primary merit of telecommuting and virtual learning is their contribution to the pollution contraction in many large cities. Undoubtedly, due to the excessive emissions from transports of commuters or congestion during peak hours caused by a large volume of traffic on main road, a lot of urban centers suffer from severe air pollution. However, as adults and students work online at home, the number of vehicles can be greatly reduced which would greatly prevent traffic jam as well as noise pollution. As the pollution level is curbed in those cities, not only the environment itself benefit from this but also many residents will as they might enjoy fresher air and a more peaceful neighborhood .
On the other hand, I contend that the drawbacks generated by the upsurge in online working and studying are much more alarming. First of all, prolonged use of computers triggered a number of health implications. This can be exemplified by the fact that sitting in front of their computers for an undue amount of time can place users at risk of having a bad posture or eye problems like eye-strain. In the long run, these issues can be detrimental to one's health thus possibly reducing their efficiency. A second unfavorable effect of this trend is that it can be damaging to our communication skills, especially youngsters who require interaction with peers during their formative years to boost confidence and form a friendship. This can be ascribed to the fact that online learning methods often require less interpersonal interactions between learners. As a result, some students may fail to express themselves efficiently which will badly affected their team work skills as they cannot convey their ideas comprehensively.
In closing, even though our environment can benefit from the growing telecommuting and online studying, the disadvantages that individuals have to bear in terms of health and communication are much more concerning.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, well, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1794.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 332.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40361445783 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21403261983 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575301204819 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 37.8895935816 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.0 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5384615385 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38461538462 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119672154068 0.244688304435 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.040192705536 0.084324248473 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0292356738753 0.0667982634062 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0753347465241 0.151304729494 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0241833642603 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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