Around the world, more adults can work from home and more children can study from home as computer technologies
become cheaper and more accessible. Do you think it is a positive or negative development for society?
With the widespread availability of computers, more and more children and adults are choosing to study or work online. While I think that this trend has some downsides, I believe that generally it is a positive development for the society.
On the one hand, there are two main reasons why remote work or study can be considered negative. Firstly, employees and students tend to lead physically inactive lives because there is no need to commute anywhere. This sedentary lifestyle might then act as a trigger to illnesses, such as obesity or diabetes because they may not burn enough calories as they do at work or in schools. Additionally, the performance of both groups may be negatively affected due to a relaxed atmosphere at home, which makes it extremely difficult for teachers and managers to monitor their progress.
However, I believe that children and adults benefit greatly from technology-led activities in multiple ways. It is a practical solution to those people who commute long distances to their workplace or studies. By doing so, they can save valuable resources: time and money. Moreover, the relaxed working environment creates flexibility for both groups as they can choose their suitable timetabling or agenda and decide on their own what to accomplish when. Ultimately, the future seems to belong to those who are technologically advanced and computer literate. Therefore, in no way are studying and working negative development for the society.
In conclusion, although a computer-driven workplace or the learning atmosphere may seem disadvantageous, I think that it is wholly positive for society since it is practical, flexible, and useful.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, while, i think, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1410.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32075471698 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08550510592 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.618867924528 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 458.1 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4580544836 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.461538462 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3846153846 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92307692308 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307976993996 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0915442127456 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0696722393179 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168322894738 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.07514176536 0.056905535591 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.63 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, while, i think, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1410.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32075471698 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08550510592 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.618867924528 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 458.1 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4580544836 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.461538462 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3846153846 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92307692308 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307976993996 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0915442127456 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0696722393179 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168322894738 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.07514176536 0.056905535591 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.63 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.