The average standard of people s health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

Essay topics:

The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Recently, there have been a lot of discussions about health and whether it is going to improve or not. In my opinion, I think that people will become unhealthier in the future than they are now. There are many reasons that support the idea of people becoming unhealthy in the future.Firstly, one reason is that of food. People tend to eat more fast food nowadays. They tend to treat themselves with sweets and chocolate whenever they want. This appears to be because people are busier now than they used to be. So, people don’t have a chance to cook or even learn the art of cookery. Also, having a lot of unhealthy food can lead to obesity and it could be a serious issue in the future. Another reason is that technology is developing everyday. Young people enjoy buying new gadgets and the latest devices. This has a negative impact on their health, especially when they enjoy video games. Spending long hours looking at a screen can lead to bad eyesight and obesity as well. Yet another reason is that laziness is a big issue. Different forms of exercise might disappear in the future because people don’t like sports. Also, people prefer spending most of their time on the internet and the internet is growing every single day. Other people might disagree and say that health will improve in the future. They believe that new sports and new ways to exercise will appear in the future. However, I don’t think it can happen since the majority of people spend less time outdoors. Moreover, other people believe that technology will try and help people improve their health. For example, there have been some games released on the Wiiconsole that makes people exercise but technology is developing more in a negative way. For instance, many phone industries are developing new applications everyday and today’s generation likes to follow every trend. This prevents people to go outside to exercise. They like to spend more time on the internet downloading new programmes or reading gossips about celebraties. This affects people’s health badly. In conclusion, I believe that people’s health is affected negatively by fast food, technology and sports and it will be a problem in the future.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, moreover, so, well, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1829.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 373.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90348525469 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51990758436 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504021447721 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 576.0 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 16.0721442886 156% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.3092749825 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 73.16 106.682146367 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.92 20.7667163134 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.38176352705 23% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212307531492 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.066726102161 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0631399107811 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212307531492 0.151304729494 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.056905535591 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 13.0946893788 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 50.2224549098 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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