Being a celebrity - such as a famous film star or sports personality - brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think being a celebrity bring more benefits or more problems.
The improvements in it these days has increased the fame of the movies and sport stars. this has brought them challenges and favours alike . However, I am of the opinion that the advantages outweigh the downsides.
On the one hand, there are several problems associated with being a public figure. A major one is lack of privacy, which is as a result of their fans keeping up with every happenings around them. this incidentally is the fault of the stars, who usually update the world about their life occurences, such as romantic relationship and acquiring new items, on social media platforms. As a result of this, their actions are frequently being criticized by their followers. Nevertheless, they can forestall this by limiting their news to families and close friends.
On the other hand, famous personalities enjoy different benefits. they are well respected in every gathering, and so they get special considerations. For instance, a well known musician in Lagos was not allowed to join the queue during the last election. Everyone present willingly permit him to cast his vote without waiting for his turn. In addition, the fame give them the opportunity of more business contracts. Evidently, almost every company now use film or football stars as their brand ambassadors, with huge money as endorsement payment. this is because the companies enjoy considerable increase in their sales from the followers of those well known professionals.
Summing up, although the lives of public personalities, such as footballers and musicians, are constantly being scrutinized by the society; as a result their fame, it cannot be compared to the great opportunities they get in return. these include special attention and more business deals.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, incidentally, nevertheless, so, well, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1465.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23214285714 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94334234214 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.639285714286 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.9508766864 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.1764705882 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4705882353 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88235294118 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139269842555 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0416068590152 0.084324248473 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0386757220981 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0778756234406 0.151304729494 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0408820442604 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.