Being a celebrity such as famous film star or sports personality brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being celebrity brings more benefitsormore problems

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Being a celebrity such as famous film star or sports personality brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being celebrity brings more benefitsormore problems

There area quite a few number of youngs, who never have dreamed of becoming a celebrity. Admittedly, it seems to them that all famous people live happily without any sadness. However in my opinion, fame has its own drawbacks, which outweigh all advantages. In following I will express my point of view.
Firstly, celebrities are always in the spotlight. It means all around people pay attention, even discuss about their manners, behaviours and mode of dress. There are such cases, that some popstars or filmstars appear in the public unpretentious without any make up, while in scene they are flamboyant. It can make people jeer that spoil the celebrities mood. Also, there are quite a few number of so-called paparazzis, who follow famous people around in order to get some interesting photos of them to sell to a newspapers and magazines. As well every action performed by celebrity is critically assessed in some social networks. Therefore they are reluctant to avoid come into sight of community and live like ordinary people.
Secondly, there are many obstacles, that disturb celebrities' peaceful, personal life. In most cases in lure of profit chick magazines or other social networks make a false stories about famous people. This in turn bring harm to both of celebritie's career and their personal life. Actually, most celebrities' family is broken up by such kind of rumours.
On the other hand celebrities earn a lot of money. So they afford themselves all high-end and luxury things and they never have had a financial problem.
In conclusion, although, it seems that celebrities' life is full of joy, in reality they undergo quite a few problems, which are greater than all benefits.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, kind of, in most cases, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1418.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0462633452 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69895922476 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608540925267 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.384769539078 520% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.8546448254 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.7777777778 106.682146367 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6111111111 20.7667163134 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 26.0 5.01903807615 518% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172372970746 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0539272858265 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497858908184 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0891581427603 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0546627150392 0.056905535591 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.0946893788 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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