Central and local government make a frantic attempt to promote festivals to create a lot of revenue. Some people think this money should be invested in social programs for the poor.
Nowadays, we live in an age of modern society. As a result, central and local government try to promote festival so as to increase revenue. However, some people believe that it is necessary to invest money in social programs for the poor. I agree that money used for social program need to be prioritized.
On the other hand, it is undeniable that investing festival will bring a great deal of advantages. The revenue which comes from promoting festivals may become the crucial elements to deal with financial disorder. Moreover, it should be highlighted that improving tourists can lead to enhancing reputations for local area. If local government make a frantic attempt to promote festivals, local cities will become one of the best destination for tourists.
However, I believe that there are number of advantages to investing money in social programs instead of festivals. First of all, the demand of the poor is more pressing than others. Some researches point out that the number of unemployment is increasing annual year. Moreover, unemployed people have a tendency to become the poor. Because the rate of jobless people will have a lot of negative effects on society, government need to back up them.
Another point is that promoting social programs play a vital role in decreasing social issues. A reason for that is that if central and local government subsidize the amount of budget which are provided for medicine and charity, the life quality of citizen will be improved. As a consequences, people do not have worry about their life and the number of crime will be decreased.
To sum up, although promoting festivals have a lot of positive influences on creating revenue. central and local government should focus on investing in social programs for the poor.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, moreover, so, as to, as a result, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1485.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05102040816 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73607480279 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52380952381 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 470.7 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.7595394802 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 82.5 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3333333333 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61111111111 7.06120827912 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.531958791178 0.244688304435 217% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149394854059 0.084324248473 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11062466548 0.0667982634062 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.298559996925 0.151304729494 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0979179457072 0.056905535591 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.0946893788 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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