As child obesity becomes a serious health issue in today’s society, some people feel that TV commercials advertising junk food aimed at kids should not be shown before 9pm.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view
Nowadays the health of the children is at a stake because of the high prevalence of obesity among them. Presently, there are many remedial measures and serious concerns are addressing to tackle this issue in the society. The opinion of some folks regarding the curbing of TV commercials on fast food till 9 pm may not be a good solution to solve this issue. Therefore, I totally discord with this statement because from my notion this method can be less effective for some reasons.
There is a multifarious point to endorse my view. First and foremost, the adverts of junk foods can be found in every nook and corner of our society in the form of billboards, leaflets, etc as a part of their promotions. The influence of junk foods is therefore not only from the TV commercials but also from other sources too. Hence the idea of eliminating fast food add from TV cannot contribute much to the well-health of the children.
Furthermore, today’s generation are more fascinated by the computers and mobiles than any other form of medias like TV. The pop-up of advertisements while using the electronic gadgets sometimes attract the kids more towards the unconventional cuisines. Moreover, the parents who live a rat-race life may be the definite cause of overweighted child because most of them buy fast foods as they do not have enough time to cook healthy food for their child.
From my point of view, therefore the curtailing of commercials can do a little with the health issues and there are many other possible measures like strict regulations from parents and from government to reduce the selling and up-selling of junkfoods and so on.
To recapitulate, the necessity to address the obesity is the need of the hour in our society, however I believe that TV commercials itself cannot make a huge impact in this burning issue.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Hence,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1535.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88853503185 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79902971139 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573248407643 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 476.1 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.5152645845 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.076923077 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1538461538 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92307692308 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272089278005 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0870847240748 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0266693027075 0.0667982634062 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135679274103 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449682477364 0.056905535591 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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