As children become adults, their social behavior changes in some ways.What are the main differences between young children’s social behavior and that of adults. To what extend are the changes that took place good?

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As children become adults, their social behavior changes in some ways.
What are the main differences between young children’s social behavior and that of adults. To what extend are the changes that took place good?

There has been some debate and people has been saying as children become adults, their social behaviour doesn't change at all. I would reason that there are some remarkable differences in our social behaviour as we get older.
First, young children often behave by their natural instinct while adults are more careful in doing everything. For example, children tend to express themselves much more openly than they do when older. However, when they are adults, they learn to hide their real feelings. Second, adults often obey the public regulation or legal law while children do not care much about what they are doing,breaking the social rule due to lack of knowledege and living experience.
In my opinion, the change from children to adults play a crucial role in people’s social behaviour. When peolple get older, their life go through a lot of stories and lessons not only from themselves but also from other individuals. Therefore, they have better knowledge and life’s experience to behave in a better way. For instance, children cannot know to stop at the red light traffic colum before they are taught at school during their growing up period. It may a simple rule, but it takes time for people to their learn in their life that obeying social rules is making our world become better.
To conclude, it is a good thing if adults can retain some childlike qualities in their social behaviour. Although social behaviour will change when people grow up but this change is better for our life.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1257.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94881889764 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46197758371 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.590551181102 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 380.7 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.8306859205 49.4020404114 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.6923076923 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5384615385 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15384615385 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28733640487 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106887888829 0.084324248473 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0683165315669 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189955355038 0.151304729494 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0519119500045 0.056905535591 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 78.4519038076 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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