The issue as to whether children are able to decide their own lives without the permission of their teachers and parents is certainly contentious. Moreover, people often claim that the law should be revised to in order to make the community accept that children become mature when they are younger. From my perspective, I completely disagree with the statement, and the opinion will be shed light on in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, it is unreasonable to allow the children to make their own decisions at younger age. The reason for this is because the children are immature during their young age. The children are incapable of making the right choice for their lives and not mature enough to be responsible for their own career. For instance, many children went astray such as playing truant and drop out of school when they were in junior high school. As the result, permitting children to make their decisions at younger age is inadequate.
Apart from the reason that elucidated above, the capability of self-reliance are deficient in the children when they are still young. Most of the children cannot dictate independently at the age merely over fifteen. Take Taiwan for example, plenty of children depend on their parents and teacher to decide their future lives. Specifically, parents dictate the agenda for their children such as extracurricular activities and going to the cram school after school.
Last but not least, it is detrimental for the society to adjust the law to accept children to make decision when over fifteen. This scenario would not only endanger the children’s future career, but also inflict massive problem for the society.
By way of conclusion, as I have argued above, I utterly consent that children should not be allowed to make decisions for their lives when they are young on account of their immature mind.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 11, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
The issue as to whether children are able to decide their own l...
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Line 3, column 126, Rule ID: REASON_IS_BECAUSE[1]
Message: Probably an incorrect phrase. Use 'the reason 'is that''.
Suggestion: is that
...ons at younger age. The reason for this is because the children are immature during their ...
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Line 5, column 435, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...extracurricular activities and going to the cram school after school. Last but not l...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, still, apart from, as to, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1572.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08737864078 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68565520808 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501618122977 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 483.3 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.4935143867 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 104.8 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317077004 0.244688304435 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124095410254 0.084324248473 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0697960915382 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19394161198 0.151304729494 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0600561600176 0.056905535591 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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