Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters ( such as food, clothes, and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is imp

Making decisions is a crutial stage which every individual would experience frequently in their life time. People argue that children should be permitted to make their own choices on daily matters. However, others believe it would create a society which the individuals only think about themselves. In my view, I opine that allowing children to make their own choices is fundamental, and parents should achieve a balance of it.

People who endorse to allow their children to decide the matters is necessary because it cultivates their independence, which contributes children to be mentally mature. Children could learn to take responsibility of the choice they make, whilst acquiring the experience of how to make a decent decision. For instance, in terms of food and drinks, children are capable of choosing what they prefer to relish rather than being decided by their parents. In this way, children could foster their self-reliance and learn to be liable of the choices they make.

On the other hand, the opponents claim it is inadequate to let children make decision of what they expect due to the fact that children are immature to make appropriate choices. As the development of their mind and mentality are not fully developed, children are often devoid of the ability to make the choices which is beneficial and effective to them. To demonstrate, children are more likely to opt fast food for meals instead of a set of course that contains balanced diet. Thus, children give priorities on what they are fond of.

All in all, as argued above, I firmly believe children should be given the freedom to make their own decisions. Nevertheless, it is paramount to achieve the balance between it.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, nevertheless, so, thus, for instance, of course, in my view, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1426.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05673758865 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7275474542 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549645390071 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5647315297 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.857142857 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1428571429 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.375007452789 0.244688304435 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132782010076 0.084324248473 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804688158666 0.0667982634062 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23031513472 0.151304729494 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0949578982836 0.056905535591 167% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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