Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters such as food clothes and entertainment is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes Other people believe that it is important

Essay topics:

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters ( such as food, clothes, and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decision about matter that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

People have different views about the right of young children to make their own decision in their life. While some people think that let children do everything they want lead to the appearance of selfish people in a society, I think that trend will create a independence generation.

There are some evidences dedicating that allowing the young to choose their daily routine such as choosing food, clothes, and unwind activities could make they only think about themselves. For example, parents nowadays always spoil their children and try to do everything they require to satisfied the children. As a result, children tend to get used with being an apple of their parents' s eyes, which develop to some detrimental behaviors when they have to become a part of society when they grow up.

However, I strongly believe that letting children decide freely bring a huge amount of benefit for not only themselves but also their parents and society. Firstly, having the right to do their own form just a unimportant thing such as choosing the color for their socks could help children be more confident and not rely too much on their parents. In addition, it has positive impact to the young because they feel being respect by their parents, which can narrow the generation gap between the children and the parents. Secondly, if the children have to make the decision by themselves and express their thinking about what they choose, they will develop the logical thinking and build their personality ,for example taking charge for what they have done.

In conclusion, it seem to me that children could get a lot of benefit from having a right to make a decision themselves.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (38 votes)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1393.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93971631206 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48114716268 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539007092199 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 415.8 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 38.4578990586 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.3 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2 20.7667163134 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.9 7.06120827912 197% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315439268408 0.244688304435 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139037554279 0.084324248473 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731149931938 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193458192202 0.151304729494 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0921276719787 0.056905535591 162% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 78.4519038076 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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