Some people think that governments should ban dangerous sports, while others think people should have freedom to do any sports or activity. Discuss both view and give your opinion

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Some people think that governments should ban dangerous sports, while others think people should have freedom to do any sports or activity. Discuss both view and give your opinion

It is believed that government should limit some kind of sports that are not safe for a player, while there is the opponent that people should have the right to play any sports they want. Although there are some benefits and drawbacks of taking part in some dangerous sports, I suppose that the government should make some rules to control negative result and keep safe for a player.
Firstly, it is true that a lot of kind of sports should be ban because of their affection for the people including physical and mental health. For example, boxing is considered as the violent sport because player attacks each other to knock out their opponent, which can cause some serious damage to their bodies including breaking the legs, arm or even heart attack. Moreover, some people could meet the accident during compete result in becoming disable, which block their future. These people can easy get depressed and feel inferiority complex themselves, which is not the benefits that the sport should provide to people. In addition, young people watch many kinds of the sport without selection, which makes they have a tendency to develop violent behavior.
However, many people do not want to join in activities which are not dangerous because they think that is too boring and they need some thrilling to challenge yourself. Every sport contains the risk and if a player knows how to avoid it, they can enjoy relaxing time as well as protect themselves. As an example, skiing is an interesting activity providing a player with skills and encourage people to do exercise in winter. Even though the accidents sometimes happen, a player can minimize the chance of happening by using protection and choose a safe place to play.
In my opinion, I agree with the idea that the government should have some rule for a dangerous sport to reduce some negative impact of these activities for the participant. Besides that, the association holding that kind of sport should inform to participant how dangerous these sports are and the consequence so as to raise their awareness in order to prepare carefully when joining in.
In conclusion, taking part in any kind of sport is a good way to keep shape and re-energy after a long day working and every people have their own choice. However, the government should control which kind of sport should become popular because of their benefit and decrease the detrimental influence of some kind of sports to help people.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 26, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun kind seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of kinds'.
Suggestion: a lot of kinds
...for a player. Firstly, it is true that a lot of kind of sports should be ban because of thei...
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Line 2, column 60, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'banned'?
Suggestion: banned
... that a lot of kind of sports should be ban because of their affection for the peop...
^^^
Line 4, column 310, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...us these sports are and the consequence so as to raise their awareness in order to prepa...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, so, well, while, as to, for example, i suppose, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, as well as, in my opinion, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2038.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 415.0 315.596192385 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91084337349 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46502137552 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498795180723 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 623.7 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 32.1410779049 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.866666667 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6666666667 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3333333333 7.06120827912 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332878069794 0.244688304435 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120699009665 0.084324248473 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0755834233371 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198581501086 0.151304729494 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.061148867019 0.056905535591 107% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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