Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Children raised in well off families are thought to be inferior in dealing with problems that they encounter in their adult life. I completely agree with this viewpoint for two main reasons.
Firstly, although wealthier children may have access to quality education and better jobs with the social connections of their parents, it is poorer children’s diligence that gets them these coveted spots. Many world-class universities, such as Cambridge and Harvard, offer fully-funded scholarships for less wealthy applicants if they qualify. This means that poorer children have to study hard to achieve their aims and they are good at this as they have been exposed to hardships and understand the value of hard work better than their peers. Having studied in these universities, both groups of children will have even chances for employment in the later stages of their lives.
Secondly, children with financially-disadvantaged backgrounds grow up to be more independent adults having faced difficulties from a young age. They sometimes have no choice but to work to meet their financial needs. A friend of mine, for example, always dreamt of riding a bicycle, but due to familial circumstances he could not afford to buy one nor his parents. Consequently, he had to work at the age of 14 in a theme park to realize his goal. In the end, these people will be much ready for life, unlike their wealthy peers, because they develop life skills on their own and solve their problems independently.
In conclusion, not only are children from poorer backgrounds are more diligent, but also more independent than well off children. Therefore, I entirely agree they are better prepared to cope with life problems.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1436.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1654676259 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99750599367 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607913669065 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 424.8 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5619042862 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.461538462 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3846153846 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.53846153846 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227652070922 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0860766929937 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0601265613007 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158611421814 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0310877841724 0.056905535591 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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