computer games and films containing violence are popular today. some people think that these are harmful for our society and the government should ban them.others argue that such games and films are fine for entertainment.
discuss both views and give your opinion.
A controversy has arisen over the issue of whether violent films and games should be prohibited or not. In spite of the fact that these entertainments are going to be widely enjoyed as pastimes full of excitement and satisfaction, I would contend that the drawbacks firmly overweigh the sparse benefits.
Human beings have always sought ways to get the adrenalin going as this biologic alteration exerts a positive influence over their mind. Accordingly, adventurous activities which can be found in violence have witnessed a significant increase, recently. Placing violence at every single house, harsh films and games –thanks to the improvement of technology- are so prevalent due to their convenient, accessibility, and indisputably, their positive impact on human’s mood.
Detrimental effects, nonetheless, should not be underestimated. Watching or participating in violence in virtual worlds motivates people to contribute to similar activities in the real world. This approach would definitely give rise to a great sense of insecurity and fear in the society which would eventually culminate in more catastrophic issues such as vandalism and murder. A myriad of individuals, especially adolescents, have been sent to prisons for committing in crimes just as the impact of violent films and games. Undoubtedly, had they been informed about further consequences, they would have found better substitutes for their affinity with excitement.
By way of conclusion, although violent recreations benefit individuals from more tension and excitement, the disturbing side effects are much more powerful. Thus, government have to enact legislation to eliminate such hazardous activities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... positive impact on human's mood. Detrimental effects, nonetheless, should...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, if, nonetheless, so, thus, such as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1456.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.80079681275 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25636226122 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.661354581673 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1075104611 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.333333333 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9166666667 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41666666667 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144811727123 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0487473791818 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0378647155324 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0771118803514 0.151304729494 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326146849528 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.36 12.4159519038 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.29 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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