In developing countries, children in rural communities have less access to education. Some people believe that the problem can be solved by providing more schools and teachers, while others think that the problem can be solved by providing computers and I

People are calling into question the way of accessing to education for children. While some advocate the idea that the children in rural area need more teachers and schools, others dismiss them as they emphasize more on taking the advantage of using the technology. Both sides of the argument present rational ideas, which will be elaborated.
On the one hand, supporters of using traditional methods such as using schools and teachers assert that the benefits accruing to them are by no means negligible. To begin with, teachers and the schools create the good atmosphere and make the environment ready for the children. That is to say, the more children go to school, the more they are familiar with the academic atmosphere and can be more productive. In other words, they can ask any question from their teacher and also collaborate easily with their friends and learn from each other. Moreover, the schools make the children more punctuated. More specifically, needing to go to school at a certain time each day, these children would grown up while learning how they have to be act and respect the time and rules of a place.
On the other hand, others put forward the argument that building of new facilities and have more teachers, simply, not working. The most compelling reason justifying their assertion is that in the era that we are surrounding by new technology it is a waste of money to build more schools and try to send more teachers to rural areas. To put it differently, in the less affluent countries due to the fact that the resources are limited, instead of allot these budget for building schools, simply government can spend less amount of money and use the internet and computers so the children can learn over the internet. Furthermore, by using the internet, children, themselves, can sign up for different free online courses and learn more about the topic of their interest. This in turn, has a far-reaching positive impact on the knowledge of each student.
To sum up, there are logical points on both sides; however, I am of the opinion that it would be better of if the students try to use the new technology to be educated over the usage of teachers and schools.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 694, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[2]
Message: Did you mean 'have grown' or 'grow'?
Suggestion: have grown; grow
...ain time each day, these children would grown up while learning how they have to be a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, while, such as, in other words, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand, that is to say

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1818.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 378.0 315.596192385 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80952380952 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6043841557 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518518518519 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 558.9 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.7877538268 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.2 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.13333333333 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253127036561 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0879746632519 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049082974499 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149948125919 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0472549699864 0.056905535591 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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