Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout the history family has paled a prominent role in all society. Some people may hold the view that gone are the days when individuals prefer to have extended families. On the other hands, some disagree. Depending on the personality type, personal experiences, and emotional concernc people have various attitude toward this issue. I, personally, think that nowadays the importance of extended family has been decliend. I hold this viewpoint because trend of people's life has been changed and also people are more inclined to their friends rather than their relatives.
Firstly, it goes without saying that people's life is more different than the past. In the past ther was not such complex way of life. Take a communication as an example. People now can readily have contact with each other, while it was more inconveniont in the past. They used their smartphones to send their massages. With this in mind, extended family is going to be less important because people can create numerious contacts with their peers, co-workers and anybody else. In the past, because of the lack of such opportunities in connection, individulas wanted to have big families to share their ideas and have fun times.
Secondly, today's community members are more inclined to their friends. They spend most of thier times at work or school with their friends in compariosn to their families. In the past, people in the extended families used to have parties or other ritual ceremonies together. On the other hand, individuals, especially the youngs, prefer to participate in their peers and co-aged ones' parties. A noteworthy statistics, which are revealed by a social study, show that the number of extended families in our country are going to decrease because of changing trend in the people's mind. In their opinion, they are more inmitit with thier friends rather than grandparents, cousins and aunt.
To put it in a nutshell, it is crystal clear that extended families has lost their position in people's mind and they ares be replaced by friends. Ease of communication and friends is the two major that changed this trend.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1780.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 349.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10028653295 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63770973841 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532951289398 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 539.1 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.9512735177 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.7619047619 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.619047619 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 7.06120827912 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138934267455 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0465741438773 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450180557175 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0893338373246 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0438381538544 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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