Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is an undeniable fact that being financially responsible is among the most popular topics which has caused heated debate over a long period of time. Depending on personality and personal experiences, people have various attitudes towards this issue. Some hold the idea that teaching children to manage their own money at young age can be useful when they grow up; on the other hand, others disagree. From my point of view, it is a good idea that can make them financially responsible adults. In the following paragraphs, I will explain my viewpoint through two main reasons.
The first reasons that comes to mind playing a major part is the fact that, by teaching children at young age, they will be able to stick to the budjet when they grow up. It goes without saying that, in this fast changing world that prices are increasing every day, it is very important to be able to manage incomes and spendings. An example can illuminate this claim. I remember, when I was a kid, my family was faced an array of financial problems. My father was working very hard, and my mother was very causius about spending money. By a good managing after a while we could by a house. My mother had been taught how to manage money and stick to the budget when she was child. As you can see, bieing able to manage money is a very vital today.
Equally important, the reason behind why I agree with the statement is that children can learn better when they are at young age. The noteworthy statistics show that childs whom their parents learn them how to manage their money, do not have as many financial problem as those who are not been taught. For instance, my parents since I was a kid, tauht me how to spend my money and do not buy what I do not really need. Today when I want to buy somthing I pay attention to my perimary needs which are more important than others. This experiance taught me to be aware of my money when I grow up and helped me to avoid financial problems.
To make a long story short, based on the afromentioned arguments, there are many reasons which can persuade people to teach their childern how to manage their own money. Apparently, there are many other reasons and examples challenging the claim. All in all, I strongly agree with this statement.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, first, really, so, while, for instance, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1862.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55256723716 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41836359829 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523227383863 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.8895974995 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.6666666667 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4761904762 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85714285714 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265593651728 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0768829547489 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0651880968554 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171706621819 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0338659765547 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.11 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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