Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history the family has played a prominent role in all societies. Some people may hold the view that gone are the days when individuals prefer to have extended families. On the other hand, some disagree. Depending on the personality type, personal experiences, and emotional concerns, people have various attitudes toward this issue. I, personally, think that nowadays the importance of extended family has been declined. I hold this viewpoint because trend of people's life has been changed and also people are more inclined to their friends rather than their relatives.
Firstly, it goes without saying that people's life is more different from the past generation. In the past there was not such complex way of life. Take communication as an example. People now can readily have contact with each other, while it was more inconvenient in the past. They used their smartphones to send their messages. With this in mind, extended family is going to be less important because people can create numerous contacts with their peers, co-workers and anybody else. In the past, because of the lack of such opportunities in connection, individuals wanted to have big families to share their ideas and have fun times.
Secondly, today's community members are more inclined to their friends. They spend most of their time at work or school with their friends in comparison to their families. In the past, people in the extended families used to have parties or other ritual ceremonies together. On the other hand, individuals, especially the young, prefer to participate in their peers' parties. A noteworthy statistics, which are revealed by a social study, show that the number of extended families in our country are going to decrease because of changing trend in the people's mind. In their opinion, they are more intimate with their friends rather than grandparents, cousins, and aunt.
To sum up, it is crystal clear that extended families have lost their position in people's minds, and friends are replacing them. Ease of communication and being with friends are two majors that have changed this trend.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 376, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to participate in their peers parties. A noteworthy statistics, which are reveale...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1782.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 343.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19533527697 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64290176674 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536443148688 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.6735545383 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.8571428571 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3333333333 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.19047619048 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137665603281 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0477860504 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0457121716362 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0912193215079 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0352850800051 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.